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Post by Sean Mason on Apr 22, 2009 20:33:16 GMT -5
Post feedback for Demetrius Randall here! Wow man... Simply WOW! I knew you was really good coming into this federation, but you totally just earned even more respect from me after this RP. I would also like to thank you for backing up my reasons for putting you in the tournament, by posting one hell of a RP. Can't wait to see more more
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Kidd Karnage
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Post by Kidd Karnage on Apr 22, 2009 21:23:18 GMT -5
yeah...asshole. haha j/k, nice work dude.
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Post by Noah Hanson on Apr 22, 2009 21:26:47 GMT -5
i hate to rain on the parade, while the rp was good and a nice read there were plenty of grammar, punctuation and capitalization mistakes. I would rate it a solid B..good stuff but remember to proofread or at least run it through Word....
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Post by Demetrius Randall on Apr 22, 2009 21:27:36 GMT -5
I have to use wordpad cuz my computer is too slow to download word....it does not have a spell check at all
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Post by Sean Mason on Apr 22, 2009 21:38:02 GMT -5
I forgot to mention that But still a very nice RP... Well beside for the part where you mixed KWF, and nMw together... It came out NWF
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Post by nolarayne on Apr 23, 2009 4:02:06 GMT -5
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Post by spikekane on Apr 23, 2009 7:48:43 GMT -5
Nice solid rp DR apart from the mistakes Noahpointed out it was pretty good and definatly gave the tournie a kick up the ass I use open office, you can get it from openoffice.org
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Post by Tyler Lucas on Apr 23, 2009 8:28:54 GMT -5
openoffice = the truth
average rp ive seen better
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Post by Demetrius Randall on Apr 30, 2009 16:29:51 GMT -5
new rp up!
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Post by spikekane on May 1, 2009 11:38:02 GMT -5
Very good roleplay sir, some genuinly enjoyable parts. But here's the critiq: using words like "heel" in a roleplay tends to break the "suspension of disbelief" and snaps people out pof the story (don't worry your not the only one who's done it this week) also referencing things that have happened in real life wrestling tends to drag a roleplay down. I'm not disagreeing with what you said it's actually what I'm aiming for. But things like that again break the pretend image and remind people that it's all fake...or faker than pro wrestling lol. But all in all, it was a very good roleplay and I enjoyed it
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Post by Demetrius Randall on May 1, 2009 16:38:45 GMT -5
when rping I tend to look at it as our federation exists the same time as WWE. lol no clue why though.
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Post by Demetrius Randall on May 3, 2009 12:32:34 GMT -5
Feedback for my 2nd and 3rd plz
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